Evaluation: Q1

The time has come to start evaluating my final piece. I need to think about the whole the process of this project, from the initial planning stage all the way up to the final product. 

It is important for me to think about the areas of my title sequence that I think went well and the areas that I think I could improve upon. I need to give an understanding of how my product relates to existing media products and how I have used a range of technologies to engage my intended audience. I will be answering 7 different questions throughout my evaluation using a range of different media and programs. 

This is my first question: In what ways does your media product use, develop or challenge forms and conventions of real media products?

Evaluation Q1 from Laura Greenley on Vimeo. 

Here is my broken down, 9 shot title sequence as inspired by the Art of the Title 

Final Cut!!

This is my final cut, after many weeks of editing and filming it is finally finished and I couldn't be happier with the outcome. I can now start the process of evaluating my work.

I hope you enjoy!

Rosie- Final Piece Cut from Laura Greenley on Vimeo.

Re-writing voice over

Now that I have added new footage to the beginning of my title sequence it became very clear that the voice over that was playing over the top of the footage was both too short and didnt show enough of the characters personalilty. Therefore, I have decided to re-write the script for my voice over, making it longer so it develops Rosie's character in more depth and gives the audience and insight into her personal life and why shes ended up in the state she is now in. I've tried to make the speech more defiant and aggressive to portray the negative stereotype of her character and the rebilious nature of the clips that are shown in relation to this. I also needed to remove one of the last sections of the voice over that claimed Rosie didnt take drugs as on monday night we shot Rosie taking pills and cutting fake drugs as one of the flash back shots. With this new voice over I aim to build a stronger relationship between Rosie and the audience so that they can understand her more as a character, hopefully making her contreversial as to whether she should be liked by the audience or not. I hope that some viewers will be able to relate to the lifestyle she lives and for other viewers to be shocked by what she gets up to. This will then provide contreversial opinons on how teenagers act outside of school and the effects of their social lives. I think it's important for me to represent the negative protrayal of teenagers to show just how dangerous young peoples lives can get at such a vital stage in their lives.

‘Rosie’

Second Draft

Rosie (v.o)

I’ve done a lot of stupid things in my life. I wouldn’t say that I was proud of them but at the same time I wouldn’t say that I completely regret my actions either. When I was five I stuck a crayon up the nose of Jamie Smith because he stole my bracelet and made me cry, when I was 10 I punched the lollypop man outside of school because he didn’t tell me to ‘have a nice day’. Now I’m 17 and my life is still a mess. But I make my own choices, I live while I’m young, I’m not meant to stay at home and be quiet and shy, but go out and be daring and wild partying all day and all night… But I guess you can get away with things when you’re young can’t you? When I was little everything was just rainbows and those stupid gold stars you’d get of teachers for good work. You can’t exactly get a gold star for drinking 3 bottles of wine each week, or going out each night to a party of someone you don’t know just in the hope that you’ll get off with them. I’ll have my late nights and I’ll come home on a high, I’ll drink till I’m sick and I’ll live till I die. At the end of the day, I don’t give a fuck if people think I’m a mess. I’m not pregnant, I’m not a criminal and I’m not in some messed up, violent gang. I’m just Rosie… and this is my life.  

Shooting more footage

 

Last night I got back together with my actress Erin to shoot the final footage for my title sequence. It was suggested that their needed to be more of an introduction and development of Rosie's character in the first section of the sequence, showing why and how she goes 'off the rails' and portrays the negative stereotypes of young people. I have decided to show this by incorporating flash back style shots inbetween the footage of Rosie walking down the street. Ive included shots such as Rosie taking drugs, shots, smashing a bottle in an alley way and being passed out in a drunken state. With a further tweaking of the voice over script and the inclusion of these shots there should now be a greater connection and engagement between charatcer and audience so that they understand why her life has been turned into such a mess.

It was also suggeted that I needed to include a wider range of shots that were taken from further away than a long shot. We therefore shot two more pieces of footage of Rosie walking down the street from and extreme long shot position. This should hopefully increase my range of shots.

 

Rough Cut 3

This is rough cut number three of Rosie. I have changed the music at the start of the opening introduction scene and added some freeze frames to combat the issues of credit running times. Hopefully this is will be a slight improvement to the last rough cut and shows some development of ideas.
Enjoy

Rosie- Rough cut 4 from Laura Greenley on Vimeo.

Rough Cut 2

This is the second rough cut for my final piece. Here I have changed the order of my sequence, added some addisive dissolves and tested out some darker music for the voice over to contrast with the upbeat backing track that has been used for the title sequence. There are still features that need to be changed but these should not take long to do.

Enjoy

 

Rosie- Rough cut 2 from Laura Greenley on Vimeo.

Additive Dissolves

In today's lesson whilst editing we decided that something needed to be done to improve the quality of some of the shots and to tackle the major issues with focusing. The problem with a lot of my shots was that because I didn't have a a professional Steadicam to be able to use the shots were incredibly unstable and this showed up very obviously when they were put onto the editing software. I decided that to cover this problem up, and to improve the potential of the piece I would cut the footage and place in additive dissolves between the cuts to act as transitions and to cover up the focusing mistakes. This worked really well and I really liked the quirky effect that it gave to the piece. I added this throughout the title sequence and within the opening scene too. It became the key transition of the piece. 

Here are some shots of where I used the additive dissolve. 

Switching scenes

Here is a sound cloud podcast of my decision to switch around the opening scene and title sequence of my final piece, enjoy!